6 Sentence Stories
Story 1
1.) The main character is trying to make his way home on a dark empty street.
2.) He hears strange sounds coming from behind him and begins to walk faster and faster.
3.) In his panicked state he makes a wrong turn down a dead-end alley.
4.) With his back against a wall the sound grows closer and louder.
5.) The character sees a cracked door on the side of the alley and quickly throws it open and slams it behind him
6.) The character is breathing heavy in the dark room when he suddenly hears the sound right next to him.
Story 2
2.)The pencil is busy at work on his desk when the tip of the pencil suddenly breaks
1.)The pencil wants to be sharp again so he can continue to work
3.)The pencil goes to an electric sharpener on his desk but the sharpener is jammed
4.)The pencil is frustrated after repeatedly using the sharpener with no result
5.)The pencil calms down and searches his desk for another option. He spots a manual sharpener and makes his way to it
6.)The pencil uses the sharpener and succeeds in making a sharp tip. He celebrates by jumping in the air, but ends up landing on the sharp tip causing it to break again.
Be careful with your ideas. Both of them, especially the first one, are going to end with the audience expecting more. I can understand an ironic ending like with the pencil being so happy that he has sharp tip and celebrating so much that he ends up breaking his tip again, but ending the animation with the conflict unresolved like in the first example may just come across as lazy to the viewer. Also make sure you have a deeper moral or theme to your concepts. These are supposed to be meaningful stories, not just playful animations.
I absolutely love the direction of the first one—I can visualize it really well and it sounds like there will be really cool lighting, sound and camera effects—but it really needs a more solid ending. I could see some sort of twist, like the door actually leading him to the stomach of some monster or a worse situation, I just think a visual “uh-oh” needs to accompany the sound. Very good idea though! With the suspense it would really pull the audience in.
Pencil ending makes me laugh—but I think showing the sharpener as being jammed would be difficult. Also, I think having competition–like with a mechanical pencil and/or pen would add more interest. I’d like to see which direction this takes! =)
i love the irony of the pencil story at the end and i feel it is the stronger story. The story with the alley i feel has been done too many times to make it effetive
Whoa tons of helpful advice.
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