Fully Revised Final Story Idea

Title: War on the 32nd Floor.

Concept: When you least expect it, events can unfold to make you think about the bigger issues.

Premise: A man trying to get to a business meeting meets with a boy protesting the war, who forces him to think about more important issues.

1. The main character is walking into a building and stops for a moment when he sees a small boy with a pendent standing outside holding a sign protesting the war.

2. The main character looks at his watch, noticing the time, and rushes through the door into the elevator and pushes the 32nd floor button.

3. The elevator stops on the 9th floor and opens to the same boy standing there holding another sign protesting the war, this one with more information printed on it. The main character looks at the boy and then pushes the button for the 32nd floor again.

4. The elevator stops again on the 11th floor and the doors open to the same boy standing there holding another sign with even more information protesting the Iraq war. The character looks at the boy in anger and then at his watch and quickly presses the 32nd floor button several times as the doors close.

5. The elevator stops a final time on the 20th floor and the main character hides as the doors open. The main character peeks out to see the boy’s pendent and sign lying on the floor but the boy is missing. The man looks down and reads the sign, stunned as the doors slowly close.

6. The doors open on the 32nd floor but the man is no longer in the elevator. The camera cuts back down to the street where the man is now standing outside the building holding a protest sign.

 

Herbert is walking into an office building and stops for a moment, looking over at a young boy wearing a pendent and holding a sign that reads “Stop the war” Herbert looks at his watch, noticing what time it is and quickly rushes inside to the elevator and pressed the button for the 32nd floor. The elevator dings and stops on the 9th floor and the doors open where the very same boy from downstairs is standing there holding another sign that reads “Stop the war before its too late!” Herbert looks at the boy confused and presses the button for the 32nd floor again. The elevator closes and begins moving up and dings again stopping at the 11th floor. The doors open and once again the boy is standing in front of the elevator holding a sign reading “Stop the war! Time is running out!” Herbert looks at boy in anger and then at his watch and quickly presses the 32nd floor button multiple times as the doors close. The elevator moves upwards again only to ding at the 20th floor. As the doors open, Herbert hides in the corner of the elevator and frantically presses the button for the 32nd floor but the doors will not close. Herbert peeks his head out of the elevator slowly and sees the boy’s pendent and sign lying on the floor but the boy is nowhere to be seen. Herbert reads the sign and becomes stunned as the doors slowly close. The elevator dings as it finally reaches the 32nd floor and the doors open but Herbert is not in the elevator. Herbert is down on the street in front of the office building, wearing the boy’s pendent and holding a sign reading “Please stop the war now!”

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