Throughout the years, many colleges have had much controversy over whether or not athletes should be paid to play in college. This deciding factor is still “no” at the moment but continues to be up in the air about whether or not athletes should get paid. Paying athletes would just lead to loss in revenue as well as other sports on campus that are not as popular, and would also result in greed. Therefor athletes should to not get a salary, and should not be paid for playing a sport.
Athletes argue that much of their time goes into sports, and that they never have time to work, or earn money towards their college tuition. What most athletes do not mention is the scholarships, or other funds that they have received while playing their sport. Most of the athletes who want to be paid are the ones who are better known, and believe they are the reason people are at the sporting events. This statement can be true, but it does not mean they bring in all the revenue from an event. For example, football, and basketball games are typically big money makers for a school, but it’s usually not just because of the players. There is a lot of money that is already going into programs such as, the concessions, the gear, maintenance workers, electric, seats, plumbing and much more. Paying all the athletes would just add more to the expenses.
If a college wanted to end up paying their athletes, they would not be allowed to just pay for certain students, and certain sports. It would not be fair to say that all the football players are allowed to receive a salary, when the swimming team cannot. Every athlete will claim that they work just as hard as the other athlete, and whether it is true or not, it is not fair to only pay certain players. This also leads in to say that what if they did pay the players and the athletic program had a bad year. This may lead to loss of ticket sales, and television deals/contracts. The program would still have to pay the players and possibly result in money loss.
Furthermore it is a known fact everybody has some sort of greed to their needs. If colleges ended up handing out money to their players, it would soon result in wanting more. If one decided to give an athlete say 2,500 a year, it would probably not even come close to what their ideal wants are. Athletes are already treated as celebrities around campus, and just giving in to even more of their wants will just lead to collision, and madness. People always want more, and we would eventually have to give them what they wanted just to find balance and cooperation.
In conclusion, athletes should just not be paid for doing something that they signed up for. Thus leads to saving money, keeping respect, and maintaining a healthy relationship between athletes, and others as well. Colleges have not legally paid college students before, and have been just fine, so why do we feel the need to change something that has worked well for many years?
Hi Anna –
Advice:
1) Good intro, but work on your thesis. It is essentially the outline for your argument. “College athletes should not be paid to play because (point 1), (point 2), and (point3).”
2) Bring more focus to your first point. You first present the idea that athletes do not need more money, but then move to the topic concerning event revenues. Either make the connection stronger or decide if you should focus on just one of these arguments.
3) In your third paragraph, make it clearer as to what argument you are making. You start discussing something without first explain what your point is. So think about your topic sentence, essentially make it clearer and to the point – perhaps: “Another reason why student athletes should not be paid to play is because there would not be enough money to pay all athletes in all college sports.”
4) Your third point is interesting, but you need more specific examples. You are drawing some assuming conclusions about student athletes as well. Can you present this point in a less bias tone?
Kudos:
1) Good start with your Introduction. While you should try to expand this a bit for Essay #1, you do a good job explaining the situation and problem in a short amount of time.
We can discuss this more at your conference! Good start though.
-Jenn