Punctuation Critique

Although I do not feel that either of the two paragraphs make sense, I decided to solely focus on critiquing the second one.  This particular paragraph does not make sense for a variety of reasons.  However, the biggest problem with this paragraph is that the punctuation marks are not put in the right place, thus confusing the reader.  This entire section of writing does not contain one single comma.  The writer incorporated periods into numerous spots where commas would make a lot more sense.  Also, the way in which particular sentences were structured made the writing very unclear for the reader.  Below is the same paragraph, but with a few minor changes in the punctuation marks and sentence structure.  Although I am still unclear about what was trying to be communicated within this paragraph, I do feel that my revisions truly make the writing read a bit more smoothly and logically.

One dollar and eighty-seven cents, that was all, and sixty cents of it was in pennies.  Pennies were saved one and two at a time by bulldozing the grocer, the vegetable man, and the butcher until one’s cheeks burned with the silent imputation of parsimony.  Della counted it three times; each time getting one dollar and eighty-seven cents.  The next day would be Christmas.

There was clearly nothing to do but flop down on the shabby, little couch and howl.  So, Della did exactly that.  As a result, the moral reflection that life is made up of sobs, a whole lot of sniffles, and smiles was instigated.