Essay #2 Thesis Statement

Cyber-bullying is a widespread problem sweeping through schools all over the world. Although this is a relatively new social issue it can have a direct effect on both our and our children’s future.


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mgrohowSeptember 23rd, 2011 at 8:56 am

Sarah, maybe you’d like to just focus on cyber-bullying in the US? By acknowledging that it happens all over the world in your thesis statement, signals to readers that you are going to discuss how / where it’s happening “all over the world.”

Also, I asked for an evolved thesis statement, in which you flesh out some of the terms you are using. Such as, “direct effects,” in your thesis. What is an example of a “direct effect?”

I’d like to see more thinking on this.

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