I feel I worked on my rhetorical analysis at a very timely manner. I was very confused and found the assignment pretty hard to get started on but I did as much as I could by talking to my peers and e-mailing Brittany to help me organized this paper. I felt that if I made a better outline I maybe could have found better points to make in for this paper. But I feel my strengths of this assignment was looking at this PSA from different approaches. Brittany helped me out with looking at the PSAs message one way and I was talking to her as if I was looking at the PSA another way. I feel I could have worked on my thesis statement a little bit more to help make improvements to it, however I feel that I covered all the points I mentioned in my intro/thesis paragraph. I feel as if I tied everything together well for a conclusion for the paper but I know that my body paragraphs were some what shakey. I am glad it is over and I turned it in, but this will probably have to be one of my papers I have to revise.
Revision helps us understand our mistakes of our paper with other people or outside peers grading them to help us out for things that we do not always see. When writing a paper, there may be mistakes that you do not see, it is always good to have at least two maybe three people read over your paper and help correct mistakes so then you can go back and revise your paper to help make it a better stronger paper. You can go over the prompts that need to be in your paper for grading and base the corrections off of that. It is also good to revise someone elses paper because it helps yourself look at other people mistakes and things you see in their paper may help you look over some things in your own paper. I think it is a helpful process when doing the peer workshops because looking back at the notes that my peers left me helps me think about how to develop my paper to make it better and stronger.
Today in class I will work on: my introduction, a main focus from what I watched in my PSA and more of an outline diagram to help me get my points together. When working on the peer workshop, it was very helpful to read someone else’s piece of work to see how they got their paper started since this was a very hard time for me to do. I think overall I am making this harder than what it needs to be. I have not had too much time to focus on writing it, so hopefully taking this time in class today will help me get more of an idea and a start on get my thoughts organized and writing it down on paper.
I can not really get started with this rhetorical analysis. I think it is mainly because I do not find it to be a very interesting topic to write about, which makes it difficult. I am having the most troubles with coming up with what to write about in the body paragraphs. I feel my introduction is somewhat weak but going into my body paragraphs is very hard. I just do not know what overall to talk about for that many pages about this PSA. I try to look at the sample one given online but it is hard to relate that to the one we are doing for the you tube video. I feel that in the end I will just ramble on talking throughout my paper and it won’t all tie together. I have tried to make an outline for my paper and it is very hard just to do that. I am also a bit confused how to talk about pathos, logos, and ethos within this paper.
“Cooties.” 20 November 2007. You Tube. Video. 20 March 2009 <http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w6ylxWcwkUM>.
The criteria that should be used to determine grades for our rhetorical analysis should be pretty much just like any of our other criteria. It should be based on: audience, introduction(how strong it is and that it flows), a good thesis statement that ties well with the rest of our paper, proper english speaking language, using ethos,pathos, and logos in our paper and understanding what they mean and how we tied them in with our papers, the overall body paragraphs, the conclusion, it is the approiate paper length that is required.
I am going to use this PSA called “Cooties” because I think it is very cute and can send a message to different people in different ways. It has a clear audience and a significant message out to people but it is using children which is a more conviencing way to put your point across to some people. A message always seems to be different when children are representing it rather than a parent. It took me a very long time to find a PSA, I think they are kind of difficult to look for. But this one caught my eye and I am pretty sure I am going to stick to it. I think it meets all the requirements and I can have a good time writing about it and can easily talk about it for a paper. I look forward to writing and talking about this PSA.
I felt the two samples were similar in the fact about the point they were getting across but different with the individual topics they focused on. Powell focues on the similarities and differences with hip-hop from back then to now a days and how it changed. The next sample talks about the overall idea of why we had to go to war. I feel the introduction to the Powell sample was much more stronger and specific details with what he was going to be talking about in the article. The sample with Bush, the introduction was not as specific and more general and somewhat confusing as far as what was going to be discussed in the furthur reading of the article. I think the introduction to my rhetorical analysis should include a lot of detail with a strong opening sentence to grab my reader’s attention. Also with a specific audience and a lot of detail with in the introduction to what my paper will be about. I feel that if you get the full point across in the first opening paragraph, then the reader will have a topic he or she will be focused on and continue reading. I think this is a strong thing to consider when thinking about a rhetorical analysis. I will include the original where the original source came from, a set tone and briefly introduce the topic when going into detail later.
What I did over spring break was went to Panama City Beach Florida. We went in a group of about 40 people. My roommates and I left on Friday after classes around about 5:00. We were stopping in Cinnicinati at one of my roommates house for dinner. On our way, we were driving on a busy construction road and stopped suddenly while getting rear ended. We did not get hurt nor did the car we were driving in, the other car however, was pretty bad. This backed our time up somewhat but we still managed to go to Cinnicinati, eat dinner and be on our way again to drive straight through for a car ride of about 15 hours. We arrived on Saturday at about 10 a.m. and things went pretty smoothly from there. Our condo was very nice and roomy, in our room there were 6 of us girls. And all of our friends from our group was spread out through the same hallway we were on. We were here the same time a lot of other students were and MTV was there also. I spent my time laying on the beach, swimming in the pool, partying, shopping, going to dinner and getting free gifts that was lined up along the beach. I also got to go to a Kenny Chesney concert for free and Lil Wayne. It was an overall great experience and I had a lot of fun doing it. We left on Friday night at around 11:00 p.m. and drove straight through to BG arriving here at about 3:30 p.m. on Saturday. We all had to come back to a busy day of homework.
I have done a portfolio before in english 111 and 112 class. We would write papers periodically through out the semester and at the end of the semester we would have to write one page of how we think we did for our over all portfolio and our strengths and weaknesses. We would put all the papers together in a folder and the people in the english department would grade us on our overall performance of the portfolio. This is would be the final word on whether you passed the class or not. They would bring it back to you and it would say pass or no pass on the overall folder. I think this is the only portfolios I have done. I do not remember if I have done other portfolios before college.