9/4 reader response
After reading over my peer’r review and his notes plus re-reading my essay i realized there was a few things that i could edit to make my essay better. With the help of my peer’s review i realized that some of the things i wrote were not as clear as i would like them to be. I figure that i will rephrase a few of the sentences and change some of the words that i used. Some of the things were repetitive. I also realized that my essay did not flow very well. So i plan on rephrasing and restructuring my paragraphes to see if that helps out with the flow of my essay. I figure that doing those things will help strengthen my essay.