It is easier for me to now construct a good thesis statement. I did not know the proper way to do this until the 3rd essay. I now know that everything you but into a thesis statement, you must make sure that all of it is in the body of the essay. The whole paper revolves around your opening paragraph and the thesis.
I believe that if my groups plan was an essay, it would convince readers to follow. I believe this because the plan has benefits that zombies are defenseless against. Such as cold whether, shot guns, and water. This plan did not get a lot of counter arguments during discussion. It would be easy to live in bass pro shoppe b/c there are so many supplies to use that it would take a lot of time for us to run out of supplies.
A problem that I see in the world are bad environmental habits. I feel this is important because if we don’t take care of this, it could lead to global warming and other bad things. There are many things people can do help the environment such as recycling, reusing materials, and reduce the amount of everything we use.
My working thesis is:
A trend that I see in the world is college students acting out and causing trouble. I feel this way because I have experienced it first hand.
In my essay, I am most proud that I have a lot of resources. In my past essays, my biggest struggle has been to find good quotes and statistics. I feel that I have a good amount in this paper
I have not decided on a topic yet for this essay. I have thought of many so I will put an example of one that I may consider.
A trend that I feel is coming back for Woman is the 80’s hair style. I have seen it everywhere, from women in there teen years, all the way up to women in there 60’s. I don’t know how this trend is coming back, but it is coming back with full force.
I believe that my writing skills have improved. I believe they have improved because I understand now that all writings that I will ever do need to have supporting facts. I didn’t realize how important it was. I have improved my proper sentence structure also. I would like to improve more on my supporting sentences in all my essays.
For essay #2, my topic is going to be that BGSU needs to have
more of the Emergency Blue posts all through out the campus.
The changes I need to to make in my organization is to make my introduction paragraph and thesis statement in the order that I’m going to address it in the paper.
I learned from my peer review that I need to work on my use of repeating myself through out the paper. I also need to work on my proper use of the word “there”. I plan to focus on getting down to the deatils of why I feel the way I do about my topic. I will use more specific details, and also have more facts and stats through out my next essay.