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Outline


15 Feb
  •  Introduction/ Background
  1. Sleep debt is a growing problem that could be reduced by decreasing the amount of homework teachers assign to students, going to bed earlier, but most of all by turning off the electronics.
  2. “Sleep has become increasingly devalued in the 24-hour society’ (Martin 464).
  3. “sleep problems affect virtually every aspect of day-to-day living, including mood, mental alertness, work performance, and energy level” (Epstein 472).
  • Homework/School Start Time
  1. “It is also important for teens, like all people, to maintain a consistent sleep schedule across the entire week” (NSF 484).
  2. “The starting time of school puts limits on the time available for sleep” (Carskadon 492)
  • Going to bed earlier
  1. “Staying up late can cause chaos in your sleep patterns and your ability to be alert the next day…and beyond” (NSF 487).
  • Technology
  1. A Third of Life – “…Children’s bedrooms increasingly resemble places of entertainment rather than places of sleep” (Martin 464)
  2. “Watching television is the most popular activity (76%) for adolescents in the hour before bed time, while surfing the internet/instant-messaging (44%) and talking on the phone (40%) are close behind” (NSF 485).
  3. “Nearly all adolescents (97%) have at least one electronic item — such as a television, computer, telephone or music device — in their bedroom. On average, 6th-graders have more than two of these items in their bedroom, while 12th-graders have about four” (NSF 485).
  4. “Many teens have a technological playground in their bedrooms that offers a variety of ways to stay stimulated and delay sleep” (NSF 486).
  • Counterargument
  1. “It is not difficult to project that a large number of students see a later starting time as permission to stay up later at night studying, working, surfing the net, watching television and so forth” (Carskadon 495).
  2. While these solutions seem good, you can’t make students do these things, and they are not very realistic.
  • Conclusion
  • Works Cited

 

 

Essay 1 Pre-Writing


23 Jan

I chose the essay “American’s Sleep Deprived Teens”

The main thesis from this essay was:

Today’s teens do not realize the importance sleep plays at their age, the age it which growth occurs. Likewise, parents are not aware of their teens sleeping habits and the role they can play.

The criteria I would use to evaluate this essay would be the effectiveness at reaching the intended audience, the structure of the essay, as well as the relevance of the topic.

From the goldenrod sheet I may also evaluate the development, word choice, and again, organization.

Works Cited:

"America's Sleep-Deprived Teens." The National Sleep Foundation. N.p., 28 Mar. 2006. Web. 23 Jan.
     2012. <http://www.sleepfoundation.org>.

Outline


19 Oct
  1. Introduction
  • Thesis – Smoking is not only a health risk to the smoker, but also to fellow classmates and staff, so we should take action by creating designated smoking areas, enforcing the law and also keeping our campus free of butts
  1. Main Solution – A place to smoke away from everyone that doesn’t want to be around it.
  • put benches, ash trays, and make it comfortable.
  1. Alternative Solution – Enforce the 35 feet law.
  • Increase/enforce the punishment for breaking the law.
  • Increased security outside of buildings.
  1. Second alternative solution
  • Make our campus a butt free environment
  • Keep campus a beautiful fun place to live
  • Don’t harm our animals
  1. Counterargument
  • Money costs
  • time commitment
  • We should not condone smoking on campus
  1. Conclusion

    Free-Write


    17 Oct

    I picked smoking on campus. It is disgusting, but also a right of 18 year old’s. I think it should be limited to specific areas on campus. You can’t just ban it altogether, so limit it. Put the ash tray things you put the butts in around so they do not litter. Smoking is harmful to not only the smoker, but also the people walking by, second hand smoke. It is a law that you don’t smoke within 35 feet of a building. Students don’t follow this law. I think we need to enforce this law and make it more strict punishment. If we make an area that is comfortable and smoker friendly they will smoke there and not all over and abide by the law. we need to try to reduce the amount of teens that smoke. Get more information out about why it is unhealthy and unsafe. Maybe someday become a smoke-free campus. I want to write to the president or the people in charge of funding for green projects because I want to write to somebody who wants to hear what my thoughts and ideas are as well as somebody who can help me and help to start a project to better our campus. I don’t want to avoid the smokers, nor do I want to walk out of a building and be hit with a cloud of smoke. They have the right to smoke, but I also have the right to not be around it if I don’t wish to. Some people with certain diseases can’t be around smoke such as asthma or others. It is important because we are young adults trying to stay healthy and being around this smoke is not good for our health. I am also paying thousands of dollars to be on this campus as are all the other students, why not do our best to keep it beautiful so that we can all enjoy it instead of trashing it. I don’t want to walk around and all I see are butts littering the ground. We have a lot of animals, primarily squirrels and if they try to eat them or something they could choke or die. The animals are part of this campus as well, they are fun to watch and look at so why would we want to kill them? I think it would be a difficult process that would happen over time, but I think it would benefit everyone in the end. It would make our campus beautiful and enjoyable. Nobody should have to be around something harmful if they don’t wish to. We are here to further our education and realize our potential, not harm our future potential. It causes lots of diseases. Cancer, lung problems, asthma. It makes your teeth gross. Why ruin what we don’t have to. Have a program to help people stop smoking if it’s what they want. You can’t force them, but help them make the right decision and then help them follow through with the process. Make sure they know the dangers of smoking and the harmful effects of second hand smoke as well. Show how it effects our bodies and the bodies of others.

    Essay 2 Pre-Writing


    23 Sep

    The topic I chose was the argument of whether or not extracurricular activities are an important part of a child’s life. I feel like this is a good choice for me because I feel as though I know a lot of points I want to make already about the benefits, but also have solid counterargument. I can also research a lot of statistics and facts about the topic to help me clearly state my opinion. I also feel that now that I am in college and out of high school I see just how important they can be. I feel that this issue is close to me because I was not part of many things, and I regret that, so if I can inform and persuade others to join it would be great! I also feel that though this may not be a hot button issue, that it is very important to parents and maybe even students.

    1. My purpose is to persuade parents to see the importance of extracurricular activities and sports, and look past the time and money commitment.

    2. Extracurricular activities are key to a child’s life for many reasons including, landing future jobs, having a sense of belonging and team, and also staying fit and healthy.

    I. Extracurricular activities have many benefits that is is worth your time and money to invest in your children.

    II. I feel that being involved will help kids to realize their potential, but also to stay healthy.

    III. Having these activities on someone’s resume will help them stand out to future employers.

    Being active in sports will keep your kids healthy and in shape.

    Being on any sort of organization, team, or club will help you kid have a sense of team as well as belonging.

    IV. It is a big money and time commitment from you as a parent.

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