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http://seattletimes.nwsource.com/html/localnews/2008083745_webmetro31m.html

I chose this wesite because it is an actual newspaper. It gives a great example on how riding on a bus service is much cheaper and more convenient to ride on than driving your own car.

http://www.nsc.org/ehc/mobile/mse_fs.html

I chose this website because it seems like a real safetly council. The website doesn’t look like it was just put together. It also explains how driving is bad for our environment, and riding a bus service or carpooling is much better for our environment.

What I liked most about my final essay was the fact that I could finally write about something I really enjoy.  In the past I rarely got to write about something I wanted. I also liked the fact that I didn’t need to have sources. I could just write whatever I wanted. I also liked how my paper just formed into one long essay.

I would definately work on my MUGS if I had more time on the paper.

I changed the order of some of my paragraphs, or I formed new paragraphs. I did this because some of the paragraphs were out of order, meaning they didn’t flow well with my thesis. I formed new paragraphs because some of the information I had in the paragraphs didn’t really go well with the rest of the paragraph.

What I learned about myself in the peer review is that I needed more counterarguments for people who don’t really like the band.

I plan to focus more on the counterarguments. I also plan to focus on the grammar part to remove punctuations that are not needed.

Two prewriting strategies I used were the audience awareness sheet and idea tree. The audience awareness sheet worked out well because it helped me sort out my ideas a little more. The idea tree helped me too because it helped me organize me paper.

I chose marching band as  my topic for the essay.

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