WB for 9/10
I changed the order of some of my paragraphs, or I formed new paragraphs. I did this because some of the paragraphs were out of order, meaning they didn’t flow well with my thesis. I formed new paragraphs because some of the information I had in the paragraphs didn’t really go well with the rest of the paragraph.
Heather McIntyre
September 13, 2009 @ 12:11 am
These are some excellent revisions to make! Good work.