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On Monday, the Cardinals Manager Tony La Russa announced that he will be retiring from the World Series Champions the St. Louis Cardinals.
“On Monday, three days after receiving the third World Series title of his managing career ,La Russa, announced that he would like to do something different, according to the article in the New York Times.”
“Tony leaves behind a legacy of success that will always be remembered as one of the most successful eras in Cardinals history,” the team chairman, Bill DeWitt Jr. was quoted saying in the article.
La Russa brought in 2,728 victories with his time being a manager, which is the third most victories for a manger according to the article. However, La Russa can move up to second all he needs is 35 more victories to do so.
“I’m aware of the history of the game.But I would not be happy with myself if the reason I came back was to move up one spot. That’s not why you manage,” La Russa said in the New York Times article.
Go Cardinals! (sorry..they’re my favorite team). Good story…try not to end with a quote
I like that the story was short and to the point. Probably the only thing I would say is that the first two grafs are a little redundant when they begin w/ “On Monday”, but it was great overall.
Nice story! Its weird that the retired three days after the season. He probably knew he was going to do this but didn’t want his players or fans to focus on that while they were going through the World Series.
Good newsworthy topic, good attribution.
Lots of punctuation problems! For example:
This sentence should be paraphrased, not a direct quote. Remove quote marks. No comma after La Russa:
“On Monday, three days after receiving the third World Series title of his managing career ,La Russa, announced that he would like to do something different, according to the article in the New York Times.”
Several redundancies: You don’t need to say “on Monday” twice and you don’t need to say Cardinals Manager and retire from St. Louis Cardinals:
On Monday, the Cardinals Manager Tony La Russa announced that he will be retiring from the World Series Champions the St. Louis Cardinals.
“On Monday, three days after receiving the third World Series title of his managing career ,La Russa, announced that he would like to do something different, according to the article in the New York Times.”
It is FINE to end a story with a quote; in fact, it is a good way to end it!