September 23, 2011
Today’s media and advertisements are sending the wrong message to the youth of the nation, and therefore should be filtered.
Revised:
Today’s media and advertisements are sending a mass of inappropriate and unnecessary messages to the youth of the nation; and therefore should be filtered.
September 23rd, 2011 at 12:43 pm
Save the youth!
September 23rd, 2011 at 12:44 pm
Your thesis statement is direct and to the point, after reading it I understand what your stance is on the issue.
September 23rd, 2011 at 12:45 pm
Can you be more specific about “wrong message”? That would give your reader a better idea about what to expect as they begin reading your argument. Great start!
September 23rd, 2011 at 12:45 pm
your thesis sounds really good, it flows well together, it’ll be interesting to see all your points and how your paper will go together
September 23rd, 2011 at 12:50 pm
I very much so believe this thesis statement. Very well put!