erica’s blog

My paper attracts the reader becaue it talks about what is popular with the technology especially with cell phones

What im most proud of in my essay so far in my essay is the knowledge of what i know about the Smartphone. What im a little worried about is expanding my ideas enough to have enough length to have four pages for the rough draft.

I believe my academic has improved by being able to extend on my ideas to get to the point. What I believe I still need to improve on is making a good thesis.

A trend that interest me is playing sports and being envolved in sports. The cause of this is my love for sports.

My adudience in my essay would be who ever controls the the bus shuttle. I have came up with a new plan in the bus route that is used by Miami University.

My most comfortable part of papers is going into detail and describing topic. Were im least comfortable is trying to creat a thesis statement.

My biggest concern on my second essay is finding an counter argument and being able to argue it.

What I would change about BG is the transportation to go in town and how far away some things are.

If I had more time on my paper I would of added more positives to go in depth with them instead of just a couple of them.

I need to make less pros and cons and seperate them into paragraphs.