Claiborne’s Reading Response 9/4
Claiborne Vonier
GSW 1110 – 1096
There are several things I have done to revise my This I Believe essay. In class, we had peer reviews so I was able to view comments from other students. From this activity I was able to revise my essay in the areas other students pointed out. Another revising technique I used was that I let my draft “cool,” so I waited a while after I wrote the draft to revise it. I also read my essay out loud several times so that I could more easily check to make sure the grammar and sentence structure made sense. Also, I completed the checklist on page 75 in our textbook, A Writer’s Resource. This guided me to focus on the strengths as well as the weaknesses in my essay. Another thing that I made sure I completed in my essay was that I gave examples that supported my value of purpose. This helped to make sure my essay was specific and supported the reasons that I stated throughout the paragraphs. One other way I revised my essay was by asking for more feedback. I had my roommate as well as one of her friends read over it and give me their opinions. Although they initially thought the essay was well written, I urged them to look for weaknesses so that I could improve my writing skills. After they found some errors, I was able to further advance my essay to make it more well-written.