charvis’s blog

My strongest catergory would be audience an word choice and mechanics. My weakest catergory is Development, Supporting Details and Sources.

I am concerned mainly about passing this paper, I really hope that I do well. Also I am having a hard time finding sources to defend my topic and worried that if my topic of BG having more development would even be a good topic to write about.

The only souce that I have right now is stats from the BGSU crime reports, I’m not sure where else to look for these? 1. http://www.bgsu.edu/offices/safety/page23095.html

I need to expand one paragraph and then go over my supporting details. I also need to make sure my essay makes sense and I’m not just jumping around with random topics.

I learned how to change different words to make them sound better. I learned how I don’t always catch my mistakes. Helps me learn how make better topic sentences, or changes into my new paragraphs. I will now focus on revising the little mistakes i made and making my draft better.

For my pre-writing I used the GSW portfolio & made an organized list.

The topic for my paper is intramurals.