Original Introduction: “Each year, approximately 5,000 people under the age of 21 die as a result of underage drinking; this includes 1,900 deaths from motor vehicle crashes, 1,600 as a result of homicides, 300 from suicide, as well as hundreds from other injuries such as falls, burns, and drownings” (“Underage Drinking” 1).  Despite these staggering […]

Punctuation Critique Although I do not feel that either of the two paragraphs make sense, I decided to solely focus on critiquing the second one.  This particular paragraph does not make sense for a variety of reasons.  However, the biggest problem with this paragraph is that the punctuation marks are not put in the right […]